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Hold the Parentheticals, Please

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Vol. 101 No. 1 | Citizen-centered Courts | Download PDF Version of Article
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Our writing guru Joseph Kimble offers tips for enlisting the dash and for avoiding legalese and silly, distracting parentheticals.

Original

According to the Plaintiff, Defendants Exxon Mobil Corporation (“Exxon”), Badger Oil Corporation (“Badger”), Denbury Onshore, LLC (“Denbury”), and Hilcorp Energy Company and Hilcorp Energy I, L.P. (“Hilcorp”), operated wells in the Lirette Oil & Gas Field (“the field”) pursuant to a 1933 oil, gas and mineral lease.

Revised

According to the plaintiff, the defendants Exxon Mobil Corporation, Badger Oil Corporation, Denbury Onshore, LLC, Hilcorp Energy Company, and Hilcorp Energy I, L.P. operated wells in the Lirette Oil & Gas Field under a 1933 oil, gas, and mineral lease.

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